Marshmallow Fluff

PrincessBella24 · Subject: Re: Marshmallow Fluff Sat Jun 07, 2008 9:12 pm

marsbarz88 wrote:

PrincessBella24 wrote:

marsbarz88 wrote:

PrincessBella24 wrote:

Well, id think all the questions are going to be as easy as ~~you~~ yours geek

I guess not. geek

I really like you lol!

Naturally, I've got so much charm. geek

Yeah. Did i mention that i like how out of it you are? geek

marsbarz88 · Posts: 4124 Join date: 2007-12-18 Age: 21

PrincessBella24 wrote:

Yeah. Did i mention that i like how out of it you are? geek

1.) My therapists says that the pills are half the battle. geek

2.) I tell only the truth. Razz

PrincessBella24 · Subject: Re: Marshmallow Fluff Sat Jun 07, 2008 9:26 pm

marsbarz88 wrote:

PrincessBella24 wrote:

Yeah. Did i mention that i like how out of it you are? geek

1.) My therapists says that the pills are half the battle. geek

2.) I tell only the truth. Razz

This is why i like you. This is the weirdness i appreciate! geek

marsbarz88 · Posts: 4124 Join date: 2007-12-18 Age: 21

(deleted this cause I posted the link on pg 1)

marsbarz88 · Posts: 4124 Join date: 2007-12-18 Age: 21

Some things that'd help me: Very Happy

If anything sounds off or weird and you let me know, that'd be awesome. I'll cry at first but then I'll thank you. Razz

Also, the ending, idk if I like it or its stupid or whatever. I toyed around with alt endings and then finally chose that one b/c mainly, I just wanted to end the fic. So if you think it could be better, tell me or I will hunt you down. Razz

PrincessBella24 · Subject: Re: Marshmallow Fluff Sat Jun 07, 2008 10:42 pm

Hey, i have to go to the store, real quick and then ill be back and il give you the comment, ok?

marsbarz88 · Posts: 4124 Join date: 2007-12-18 Age: 21

PrincessBella24 wrote:

Hey, i have to go to the store, real quick and then ill be back and il give you the comment, ok?

Fine, make me wait, meanie. Razz

That's cool, do what ya gotta do.

PrincessBella24 · Subject: Re: Marshmallow Fluff Sat Jun 07, 2008 11:09 pm

marsbarz88 wrote:

PrincessBella24 wrote:

Hey, i have to go to the store, real quick and then ill be back and il give you the comment, ok?

Fine, make me wait, meanie. Razz

That's cool, do what ya gotta do.

Im back, and im writing the "review". Keep your panties on geek

marsbarz88 · Posts: 4124 Join date: 2007-12-18 Age: 21

PrincessBella24 wrote:

Im back, and im writing the "review". Keep your panties on geek

I'll try to reisist the urge to pull a Britney. geek

Hurry, my bro and his gf are coming over and I get the pleasure of cooking them dinner. Rolling Eyes

PrincessBella24 · Subject: Re: Marshmallow Fluff Sat Jun 07, 2008 11:20 pm

marsbarz88 wrote:

PrincessBella24 wrote:

Im back, and im writing the "review". Keep your panties on geek

I'll try to reisist the urge to pull a Britney. geek

Hurry, my bro and his gf are coming over and I get the pleasure of cooking them dinner. Rolling Eyes

Please, resist geek

Done.

PrincessBella24 · Subject: Re: Marshmallow Fluff Sat Jun 07, 2008 11:25 pm

Ok, im writing. I feel so powerful right now geek

First of all: the smut was wicked hot and sexy. Especially the dirty talk. Idk what the hell you were complaining about. Lines like (Sorry, but im gonna quote, no matter how dirty) "Come on. Come for me babe" are pretty much mandatory on every fic, but you really made it interesting w(I said sorry!) "Come all around my cock, babe". That was super hot. Besides if you get me to fantasize like this with just one line, you know its good.

The banter was playful, and sweet, everything happy LoVe is supposed to be.

The ending was adorable, id think you have to worry about it.

I loved it.

One question: this wast their first time, right?

EDIT: I also liked that they didnt have to say they were a couple. They were just feeling it. I really liked that.

marsbarz88 · Posts: 4124 Join date: 2007-12-18 Age: 21

PrincessBella24 wrote:

Ok, im writing. I feel so powerful right now geek

First of all: the smut was wicked hot and sexy. Especially the dirty talk. Idk what the hell you were complaining about. Lines like (Sorry, but im gonna quote, no matter how dirty) "Come on. Come for me babe" are pretty much mandatory on every fic, but you really made it interesting w(I said sorry!) "Come all around my cock, babe". That was super hot. Besides if you get me to fantasize like this with just one line, you know its good.

The banter was playful, and sweet, everything happy LoVe is supposed to be.

The ending was adorable, id think you have to worry about it.

I loved it.

One question: this wast their first time, right?

Yes, you're holding my heart in your hand. Razz

Apparently my reaction when people quote lines like that is for me to smack myself in the face cause ouch. lol!

x infinity.

Thanks. Razz

Thanks some more. You're karma's golden. geek

I didn't mean for it to seem like, is that the way it read?

PrincessBella24 · Subject: Re: Marshmallow Fluff Sat Jun 07, 2008 11:49 pm

marsbarz88 wrote:

PrincessBella24 wrote:

Ok, im writing. I feel so powerful right now geek

First of all: the smut was wicked hot and sexy. Especially the dirty talk. Idk what the hell you were complaining about. Lines like (Sorry, but im gonna quote, no matter how dirty) "Come on. Come for me babe" are pretty much mandatory on every fic, but you really made it interesting w(I said sorry!) "Come all around my cock, babe". That was super hot. Besides if you get me to fantasize like this with just one line, you know its good.

The banter was playful, and sweet, everything happy LoVe is supposed to be.

The ending was adorable, id think you have to worry about it.

I loved it.

One question: this wast their first time, right?

Yes, you're holding my heart in your hand. Razz

Apparently my reaction when people quote lines like that is for me to smack myself in the face cause ouch. lol!

x infinity.

Thanks. Razz

Thanks some more. You're karma's golden. geek

I didn't mean for it to seem like, is that the way it read?

Can i squeeze it? lol!

Good lord, it was hot! get over it! Rolling Eyes

Your welcome. Very Happy

To me, yes. Maybe its just me. But yeah, it seemed more like "im thinking we are a couple" sex than "its our first time im nervous"sex.

EDIT: maybe that was it. I didnt feel V all that nervous, I felt her being aroused and hot. Which is even better lol!

Sorry what did you think i asked? Cause i said it felt like it wasnt their first time. Did you get that, or the other way around?

marsbarz88 · Posts: 4124 Join date: 2007-12-18 Age: 21

PrincessBella24 wrote:

Can i squeeze it? lol!

Good lord, it was hot! get over it! Rolling Eyes

Your welcome. Very Happy

To me, yes. Maybe its just me. But yeah, it seemed more like "im thinking we are a couple" sex than "its our first time im nervous"sex.

EDIT: maybe that was it. I didnt feel V all that nervous, I felt her being aroused and hot. Which is even better lol!

Sorry what did you think i asked? Cause i said it felt like it wasnt their first time. Did you get that, or the other way around?

No thank you. Razz

Okay fine, then we can stop talking about it now. geek

So you didn't think it was their first time, right? Cause I wasn't writing it to be her first time, her nervousness was mainly supposed to be from the fact that they were in public...hope that made sense.

-I need to hurry up and post it, on lj. The deadline is in a few hrs I think.

PrincessBella24 · Subject: Re: Marshmallow Fluff Sun Jun 08, 2008 12:20 am

marsbarz88 wrote:

PrincessBella24 wrote:

Can i squeeze it? lol!

Good lord, it was hot! get over it! Rolling Eyes

Your welcome. Very Happy

To me, yes. Maybe its just me. But yeah, it seemed more like "im thinking we are a couple" sex than "its our first time im nervous"sex.

EDIT: maybe that was it. I didnt feel V all that nervous, I felt her being aroused and hot. Which is even better lol!

Sorry what did you think i asked? Cause i said it felt like it wasnt their first time. Did you get that, or the other way around?

No thank you. Razz

Okay fine, then we can stop talking about it now. geek

So you didn't think it was their first time, right? Cause I wasn't writing it to be her first time, her nervousness was mainly supposed to be from the fact that they were in public...hope that made sense.

-I need to hurry up and post it, on lj. The deadline is in a few hrs I think.

Aww, just a little, please! geek

It was hot! nanananan geek

Exactly. I thought it wasnt their first time. Im glad we are still able to confuse each other Rolling Eyes

I know why was she a little nervous. It was perfect. I thought you had understood sth else. Sorry.

Its perfect, post it. Smile